The Sky and the Roses

The Little Watson Girl's Dreams on Paper

votey thing May 24, 2010

Filed under: Uncategorized — lilwatsongirl @ 9:05 pm

Title: Lyli

Female Lead Character: Lyli, the daughter of the Sun god and a mortal storm bringer.

Male lead character: Wanderer, a boy from the race known as the heartless, a race of people with no emotions.

Supporting Female character: There isn’t one ☺

Supporting Male character: Ryder, a werewolf in his middle ages who helps Lyli and Wanderer in their fight for life and especially helps Wanderer learn who he is.

Setting: A fictional world, on an island trapped by darkness.

-She wasn’t the kind of girl who often cried, she thought it was a silly waste of good water and that there was enough salt water in the ocean and girls did not need to act as faucets to provide more.- chapter 3 page 7

– Neither Lyli nor Wanderer had made a habit of eating their friends.- (this makes more sense in context ;D) chapter 5, page 12

-The whole trapped-in-time thing was not exactly Lyli’s cup of tea.- chapter 5 page 13

-“You can sleep first if you like, since you lent me your bed last night.”
“Okay.” Without another word Wanderer slumped against an oar and began to snore.
“Wow. That was fast.” Chapter 5 page 13

Opening Line: There is much whispering if a baby is born and does not cry, but if a baby is born and sleeps, folks shake their heads and say ‘tis black fortune for the mother. That was how it was with the baby born to dark-haired Amaya, storm-bringer.

Best literary devices:
My best one is a Flashback: check out the abnormally short chapter 7. (the whole thing is a flashback)

Best comedy/Comedic moment:
My book really has no comedy… sad I know, but true

Best drama/dramatic moment: Lightning forked across the sky lighting up the pale, scarred face of a man. He was alone at the edge of the woods. Good. He needed to be alone. He didn’t want anyone to be hurt.
The moon split the clouds and its fragile beams struck the man in the eyes. The pain started, spreading from his green eyes to the tips of his fingers. He clenched his hands, and closed his eyes, begging for release.
A gasp.
The man turned, and saw a child, an innocent boy, peering out from behind a tree.
Not the child, not the boy, please, anyone but the boy!
“Daddy?” the boys voice was hesitant, his green eyes wide with fear.
“Run! Please, run!” the pain was intense now, like fire coursing through his veins. Had it always hurt this much?
The boy looked confused, and he took a hesitant step forward.
“Go! Run to your mother, please!” in a moment he would lose control and the boy… the boy…
He began to change.
“Daddy!” the boy screamed, and began running towards the man, trying to help, only trying to help.
“NO!” but the word was only a howl, and the world went dark for the man.
The boy was alone with a monster.
“Daddy?” his voice broke, and changed into a terrified scream as the monster before him lunged.

Best Mystery/suspenseful moment: “So you think it’s the same night?”
“Does it even matter?”
“Oh, yes. It matters very much.”
In an instant, Wanderer was on his feet with his dagger in his hand. Lyli turned slowly, fear turning her heart to ice. The man who had spoken leaned against a nearby tree, looking at her and Wanderer. He held no weapon, brandished no flaming sticks, wielded no sword, but he didn’t look afraid.

Best Fantasy/science fiction: the whole story could be called fantasy/science fiction

Best illustrator (list of link to your pics): I don’t have pictures for my story, sorry


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